ENGLISH-+ERIK

COMMUNICATION

There are lots of ways to communicate one way is by phone. A phone is a little device witch

lets you talk to people across the world. Once you think of it there are millions of ways to communicate you also can communicate with you body.You can use sign Lang, actions and many more ways. You can send a message in a bottle or by plane and boats (New Sentence) now we use planes or boasts well to get it over sensor long distances across the world. In the olden days they would have used a boat there was no plane in that time.

You can use a computer by the Internet to go on to face book, moshi monsters, msn or hotmail those websites you can communicate across the Internet many things.

What things can be communicated via the Internet?

You can use a fax machine witch pix up messages for work or something you cloud send a very long way.You can send stuff as well like stuff witch is important.

Erik

You have included some great information Erik - Well Done

You have not organised your ideas or your writing into paragraphs though.

Where are your topic sentences followed by facts and details?

It would have been great to see you include more information about different forms of communication.

Take your time when you are writing Erik and include all the information that you I know you have.

MY SPEECH

Hello teachers and student my name is ERIK FUZ as you all now,I am going to talk to you about when I whent to the snow.I went to the snow with my dad, my mum, my sister brooke & my brother cooper.we had to leave earl in the morning becaus it took a long time to get there we were driving in the car and all of a sudden there was a massivN BANG !!!!!!!!! at the front of the car. my dad was very upseat that he hadehit the kangaroo. It had jumped out of the busshes.as soon as we got there we put on our snow gear and headed for the ski lift"my dad and cooper were scarde becaus it went up high.i liked to go all the way up to the top of the lift and sking all the way down the bottem arfter we did all the tings we had planed we had dinner there and left it was a long drive backwe finaly got home think it was wearth it. Think that to thank you for listing to my speach

A great Tall Tale Erik - or was it a true story?

You have sequenced your story well, it made sense.

You ahve also included some great descriptive language - Massive Bang - Well Done.

You need to write in full sentences all the time.

Your writing would also improve if you spent more time checking it for simple spelling mistakes.

Good Try - Mrs W

EXPOSITION - CHILDREN SHOULD GET $20 A WEEK

The kids can learn to save money like keeping trak of how much they spent on shopping and by things.you don't have to ask what $55minis $32 = you would now. $20 a week would make you a bilonarithe children could havehave more responsabilaty far ceaping the money and they would now get older they now thatwhen they r older they now how to spend there money proply not on junk. they can save up and buy a car. you can get a better life/job. there pearnts can trust them with money. they start lurning that money dose not fall of trees. INTRO i beleve that children should get $20 a week.There are many reasons that they should gey $20 a week. there are many kids that have disabilates in there life CONCLUSION I now that kids should get $20 a week BUT I don't now about you think about it. THEY SHOULD GET $20 A WEEK OR NOT TELL ME YOUR IDEAR TEACHERS OR STUDENTS.


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DOGS ARE BETTER THAN CATS There are many types of ways that you can tell a story about dogs and cats.Unlike dogs cats leave there hair "every where" cats rip and scratch ever think in your house. Dogs are good pets because there hunt other animals. Dogs keep their owners safe killing snakes and many more dangers animals. There are many more types of dogs like pit bulls, Labradors, German Sheppard’s, chauia, poodle and so many more.I think that more people should buy dogs so that more people wouldn’t die of snake bites, the dogs could take the risk or kill the snake or it would give you time to call someone. If someone brakes into your house your dogs will bark and scare the robber away from your house. Dogs have great hearing so they can hear snakes in the rocks but they have a disadvantage, they can only see black and white. There is a type of dog that helps people, most of the time they are Labradoors. I hope I have convinced you that dogs 'r' better then cats !!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!=P